Tuesday, September 14, 2010

The Raven Queen - Sept. 14, 2010




The Raven Queen

The Raven Queen came from simple country roots
No royal silver spoon did she carry
Raised by unpretentious witches holding great wisdom
Old Gertrude, Esmeralda and Tregarry

Three witches known as spiritual leaders of the valley
Of lowly peasants and abundant woods
Raised her up simply infused with a fiery spirit
Proclaiming the law of the land to be good

Two faces reigned within the leaders and peasants
One which was shown to The Law
The other kept hidden as they lowly bowed to the wind
Praising the moon and icy snow as it thawed

A tale of hidden woe these three leaders carried
Unbeknown to the Raven Queen
Of her true heritage and the tainted gold they kept
From the night Old Death intervened

Old Death quietly crept in on her birthing night
Stole her sweet mother away
Yet for a fee the wise leaders took her in to love
Knowing who she would be one day

An eager student their young queen became
Learning the wisdom of the truth
Quite an apprentice in the ways of the wind
She became early in her youth

All at once the fiercest Winter ever known to the valley
Brought in terrible winds and bitter snow
The young queen watched as the peasants trembled
As savage wolves entered their fold

Great hunger came to the valley along with Old Death
Dissension was called into play
Soon, each of the leaders knew the time had come
To teach her the dark side of their ways

She was pulled from light into the darkest shadows
To embrace her own true destiny
Her dark light shone through the woods and the valley
Bringing the savage wolves to bay

Fear of the Raven Queen's light spread from the valley
Coursing through the veins of The Law
Sending in fierce horsemen thundering with vengeance
Her own lifeblood they came to draw

She answered their thundering with her own call
Heads for heads, raging fire with ice
Saving the ones who took her under their wings
Returning their tainted gold at a price

Copyright *Neva Flores @2010


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39 comments:

Desert Rose said...

Loving the flow of this Neva, absolutely well written, love the photo too, Raven Queen she is indeed :)

Neva Flores said...

Thank you Desert Rose

signed...bkm said...

Love the tale and myth in this...well done - must read it once more....I love ravens ...bkm

anthonynorth said...

An excellent piece of fantasy poetry. Enjoyed it.

Carrie Burtt said...

Neva this is such a magestic and beautiful story told in your poem...truly lovely! :-)

Glynn said...

I love this story poem. You feel exactly what happens when she's swept up into the destiny, or fate, that's inevitable.

Brian Miller said...

wow this is epic and a wonderful tale you have woven. not jsut the story but the emotion that runs through it ...great oneshot!

Timoteo said...

I love your mind.

dustus said...

You are a natural poetic storyteller. Well told tale with flow and flair.

Scented Leaf said...

Very touching poem...

Arts Web Show said...

You've done a great job with this one

Beachanny said...

Beautiful and epic poem. It has the feel of the romantics along with Tennyson. It isn't easy to tell tales of such detail and mystery in rhyme these days. but you've done it so successfully. Well done. Thank you. Gay (@beachanny)

SuziCate said...

What a fabulous poem/story! Love the flow, the imagery, the tale...simply superb!

RiikaInfinityy said...

Wonderfully story! And here comes the Raven Queen with her almighty wings :3 light and dark, she existed in both side=D

G-Man said...

Destined to be a Classic!
Superb writing Neva Flores!

Collective Epiphanies said...

Beautifully epic. I have to agree with the others, you seem to have a natural affinity towards fantasy and storytelling; crafted with grace. I would love to read more for I'm certain your words will carry me on a transcendental odyssey.

Thank you for stopping by and joining my blog!

woih said...

you are an easy fit for the award..I'm passing on the One Lovely Blog Award to ya. It awaits upon my page.....
...really like your page

Shashi said...

Nice to catch up with you here Neva... nice poetry and I enjoyed it throughly...

Chris G. said...

Shudders - what a lovely tale! Great fantasy, beautifully written, with a fine flow and engaging feeling tipped with emotion. Vivid, in all its powerful imagery. Adored it! You've got style, Neva.

senderupwords said...

Neva, when I read you I am transported to another place. Somewhere in my head where I am at once calm and violent, love and ignorance. I love the way you write. Love and Light, Sender

gautami tripathy said...

Wonderful rhythm and so lyrical.

nowhere island

Kathleen Overby said...

Story shivers

Eric Alder said...

Wow, this was kinda long! But (as usual) you fill each line with fluid words and intriguing imagery.

As I've said so often before - well done, Neva!

Theron Kennedy said...

I like this one a lot Neva. Interesting and well written.

Belinda said...

Riveting!

What a wonderful read.

Whitesnake said...

I love this kind of stuff.........magical

John's comments said...

Strong fantasy story poem. Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Hope your week goes well.

emily wierenga said...

your poetry is so rich, it unearths the myths of time... well done.

Jingle said...

magical words.
beautiful story.

your work gives readers a sense of wonder and myth....

the wid0w said...

what a wonderful mystical magical tale you wove for us thank you .. looking forward to more

Maureen said...

Very skillfully woven prose poetry. Your words could be painted into stunning visuals.

Maureen said...

Very skillfully woven prose poetry. Your words could be painted into stunning visuals.

kkrige said...

As those who have gone before me, epic describes this well. Quite the story that you weave. Nice Oneshot

she said...

A magical tale. I love the old witches' names!

joanny said...

Neva

You are quite the muse, some say it was epic, perhaps it is so. But I was lost in time reading this beautiful poem of yours, Raven Queen. You managed to weave your own enchantment and put your own spin on a mythological character of your design.

Stunning One Shot,
Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

Pete Marshall said...

hi neva...yes i am late but you know why!!! that was a beautiful woven tale.. thoroughly enjoyed reading that..i could kinda link that up with some of my tales...really loved it..cheers pete

Claudia said...

wow - what a scenery - had a bit of the lord of the rings feeling - mystical and beautiful

sls646 said...

I love the story context and the way it unfolds is mesmerizing. The art work is awesome as well you did a great job here!

sls646 said...

I love the story context and the way it unfolds is mesmerizing. The art work is awesome as well you did a great job here!